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Prologue: (I suppose that's what I should call it?)

The figure watched, his hand travelling over the worn wood of the boulder in front of him. Darker figures moved behind him, the light dancing with a light breeze, framing their fearful faces, long shadows falling behind them.

Muffled steps echoed on cobblestone, the whisper of dark cloth brushing rough stone walls. Puddles reflected flickering torchlight, dark shadows creeping from a maze of alleyways.

Glancing swiftly around, the figure cocked his ear as he heard the sound of clanking metal plates close by, the shining metal glinting in the torchlight. Stiffening, he drew himself behind the boulder once more, putting a hand to his belt.

Growling in an undertone, he signaled behind him.
"Stay here."

In a swift movement, he leapt from behind the boulder, a flash of silver in his hand.

After a series of muffled thuds, a whisper followed the arrival of the man once more.

"Off you go. There is a monastery not far from here. Do not stray from the path and" glancing behind him, he said with a slight smirk "avoid guards. I will remain here and keep a watchful eye." </i> Eyeing the bodies of the soldiers, he moved towards them, picking them up one by one, moving them away from public sight.

Nodding noiselessly, the hooded figures departed, keeping to the shadows, their light footsteps fading as they quickly moved away from the site.
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So i'm starting a story/ drabble thing for a friend

Really, I'm looking for feedback so I can imrpove my writing before giving it to her :)

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*pestomonkey Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Whew, you scared me for a second. I didn't see this version the other day when I posted my comment. When I looked at it I thought "I coulda sworn I spent half an hour writing a comment for this the other night... where'd it go?" It would have bee highly possible for me to write a big long wall of text like that and then completely zone out and forget to hit submit :lol:.
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Mood: Love ~AllyxG Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
hahah
sorry for the worry :)
Thanks for the help though XD
I obviously needed it.

...and believe me, I've done that *so* many times in the past
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